Sheba was a highly trained secret agent of the FBI whose mission was to protect Prince Damien and his family. When bombs are planted on board she is able to save herself and him; while his family and the rest of the security team perished. They have now both reinvented themselves and are hiding out in the mountains. Damien is set on revenge and Sheba is seeing a Jinn who tells her of a coming war with the legendary Red Wolves. As her feelings grow for the Jinn will she step up and use her training to take a side and change the tide for humans in the upcoming war or will she follow her Jinn into his realm and never look back?
I think I may have found a new least favorite book for 2019. This book starts out telling about Red Wolves, moves to a sex fiend, then jumps to a plane crash, and then a woman who is having dreams of a jinn that is the prince of jinns that is bringing her sexual pleasure all night every night. Now there is something about an ancient typewriter. For once I am writing this as I am reading the book instead of at the end because 2 tweets about the same book in an hour seems to be enough for a while. Something needs to be said about this book, however, as the sentence I am currently on is " As she hung up the phone, spring was coming."
At least in the other book that I will not mention in this the sentences made sense, no matter how poorly they were written. I understand that these are new authors and they are just starting out, but this is crazy. You have to proof read things or at least have beta readers before you release a book. An example of one of the poor transitions in this book is as follows: " Her day job paid the bills, her night job, writing her dark erotic poetry on her antique typewriter—she was dead to the world." This sentence does not even feel like it was finished. In the rest of this review I will do my absolute best to be more supportive and give suggestions and a helpful review; but things needed to be said.
The author needs to sit down with this book and completely revamp it. By page 30 in a book you should have some idea of what is going on. When you are giving background you need to make sure that there is a clear bridge between the subjects or at least put the information in chapters. Sub-chapters would even be acceptable. Currently one paragraph you are reading about one thing and then in the very next chapter you are reading about something completely different and there is no tie in. Suggesting hallucinogenic drugs to help cope with blindness, or any kind of disability is not the thing to do. Making up a medication would have been more beneficial than basically saying oh, you're having problems becoming blind? Try LSD. I understand that the author is wanting to convey the attraction between the Jinn and the woman, Selba, but in serious moments don't just throw in intended "sexy" moments just to please yourself. They do not fit.
Descriptive terms are great when they come to describing surroundings as well as characters. That being said, be careful with how you describe things. Describing a horse as flying gives the impression not that the horse is fast, as intended, but rather that he is winged. I have noticed a plot hole that simply does not add up. At one point the author mentioned that Sheba faked her death, but that she lived in a home that her uncle had left to her and ran a daily business with influential people using her real name. Also, why if the Prince is the one basically stalking her does he refer to himself by saying things like "You have a destiny with the prince, you’ve both got a past you may want to forget, but I know you want to forget the past of the prince which haunts you in this war. The royal family line was assassinated. He believes death is a second chance for reunion. He was given that chance when you saved his life when the plane crashed. You were both saved for a purpose together. He lost everything he knew, everyone he loved and cared for. His home, his people—dead. He vowed to never be anyone with an identity."? Things like this make it seem as if they are two separate entities, not the same.
I feel as if this is the author's first attempt at writing a book after having read a lot of paranormal romance books in her past. Her thoughts are scrambled and I have no idea who the main characters of the book are other than Sheba. I am sure there is more than one prince, but it seems like stockholm syndrome or something horrid. One second she is afraid and running from these entities and the next she is acting like a female in heat. The plot lines are not clear. Or even which entity it is. There is so much jumping around and general confusion. How anyone had finished reading this book in the past is beyond me.
On page 54 we have been given another character and we are back to feeling like we are bouncing around with random information like in chapter one. I hate to say this, but this is not a book I will be suggesting to anyone to read. This book, if you want to call it that, is painful to read. It does not make any sense. I cannot in good conscience recommend this book to anyone.
This book is available on Amazon for $4.50 at https://amzn.to/2ThWGmj
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